Summary Response Outline
Summary:
- Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea ”Bully” by Lee Hirsch suggests that many students around America are being bullied in schools and that teachers and principals are not doing enough to fix the problem.
- Supporting ideas and explanations to prove main ideas Hirsch illustrates that students are being bullied by showing many different situations in which kids are being physically and mentally abused by their peers.
- Ideas attributed back to author
- Concluding sentence: restate title, author, strong verb, main id ”Bully” by Lee Hirsch demonstrates how many children in elementary and middle school are bullying others without any punishment.
Response:
- Topic sentence: title, author,,correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays___(Main Idea)________ because ___________ . “Bully” by Lee Hirsch, correctly portrays how not enough is being done to solve the bullying epidemic because the faculty in schools isn’t doing anything.
- Claim 1:
- Set-up In Hirsch’s video Hirsch suggests that teachers are not taking the steps needed to stop bullies around America.
- Evidence: Lead-in, “ quotation” (Shakespeare 1.2.13-17). A victim of bullying states to a teacher, ”I have reported the problem many times to teachers and the police and they do nothing. They tell him to stay away from me but he never does” (Hirsch).
- Explanation of quotation to prove claim: explain quote, connect to claim This directly presents how the students know the teachers are doing nothing to help the issue. It seems as if the administrators are unwilling to do what it takes to stop bullying.
- Counterclaim 1: However, ....However, Hirsch did not highlight the idea that the teachers can not directly control the bully's actions.
- Set-up The teachers cannot force the kids to do what they want but they try to take the actions needed that could lead stop the bully.
- Evidence: Lead-in, “ quotation” ( ) An example of this is, a administrator pulls a bully into her office and states, “My concern is, is that you were making someone feel so uncomfortable, that they didn't wanna be in school” (Hirsch).
- Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim: explain quote, connect to claim When the administrator pulls the bully into her office, this shows that she is aware of the bullying problem and that she wants to fix it. She has concerns about how this issue is hurting the students that she is responsible for.
- What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument? (use rebuttal progression language) Many think that the problem is solved right away after a teacher or administrator speaks to the bully, and one cannot deny that can sometimes be the case. However, many times the scenario is not solved and the bullying does not stop. For example, in the documentary when Alex, a bullied student, tells an administrator that he is being bullied, so she calls the bully into her office and tells him to stop. Even though the administrator told the bully to stop Alex testifies that that kid still bullies him on a daily basis.
- Concluding sentence: restate title, author,,correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays___(Main Idea)________ because ___________ . “Bully” by Lee Hirsch correctly portrays that teachers and adults are not doing what it takes to stop bullying around the country because they see it happening many in many places but do nothing about it.
Strong Verb List:
Tells, explains, compares, describes, gives, presents, lists, shows, defines, demonstrates, acknowledges, evaluates, classifies, adds, explores, confuses, advises, expresses, defends, asserts, features, depicts, assures, furnishes, encourages, blames, identifies, entertains, confirms, names, illustrates, confronts, offends, invites, considers, offers, judges, contrasts, predicts, misjudges, critiques, proposes, praises, demonstrates, provides, recommends, denounces, traces, simplifies, discourages, answers, solves, endorses, asks, suggests, entices, captures, supports, enumerates, classifies, teaches.
Rebuttal Progression:
1st step: Describe a "naive response" or an opposing interpretation of your position. A "naive view" is a view that you personally disagree with or a view that misses something important. But don't use the word "naive." Say something like…
One used to think that...
A common view is that...
At first glance...
Many think that....
X argues that...
Critics of ____ propose...
2nd step: Briefly explain the logic or reasoning of this "naive view." Answer the question, "Why would someone think this way? Why would they find their answer or solution logical or reasonable?" Why did I think this way? Say something like...
One cannot deny that...
This way of making sense of the position makes a degree of sense [why?]
This position seems reasonable [why?]
One can understand why someone might interpret X in this way [explain how so]
These conclusions seem compelling [why?]
3rd step: Provide a transition that indicates that you are going to contrast this "naive view." Say something like… LOTS of Evidence
However...
But it's more complicated than that...
This interpretation is helpful, but it misses an important point...
This interpretation raises a fundamental question...
While this view seems plausible/reasonable at first glance, we should look closer...
