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Summary Response Outline

Summary:

• Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea  ”Bully” by Lee Hirsch suggests that many students around America are being bullied in schools and that teachers and principals are not doing enough to fix the problem.
• Supporting ideas and explanations to prove main ideas Hirsch illustrates that students are being bullied by showing many different situations in which kids are being physically and mentally abused by their peers.
• Ideas attributed back to author
• Concluding sentence: restate  title, author, strong verb, main id       ”Bully” by Lee Hirsch demonstrates how many children in elementary and middle school are bullying others without any punishment.

Response:

• Topic sentence: title, author,,correctly  portrays/ incorrectly portrays___(Main Idea)________ because ___________ .  Hirsch correctly portrays how not enough is being done to solve the bullying epidemic because the faculty in schools isn’t doing anything.
• Claim 1:
• Set-up In Hirsch’s video Hirsch suggests that teachers are not taking the steps needed to stop bullies around America.
• Evidence: Lead-in,  “ quotation” (Shakespeare 1.2.13-17). A victim of bullying states to a teacher, ”I have reported the problem many times to teachers and the police and they do nothing. They tell him to stay away from me but he never does” (Hirsch)
• Explanation of quotation to prove claim: explain quote, connect to claim This quotation directly presents how the students know the teachers are doing nothing to help the issue. All the teachers do is talk to them and it never fixes the problem. It seems like the teachers are unwilling to fix the problem.
• Counterclaim 1: However, ....However, Hirsch did not highlight the idea that the teachers can not directly control the bully's actions.
• Set-up The teachers cannot force the kids to do what they want but they try to take the actions needed that could lead stop the bully.
• Evidence: Lead-in,  “ quotation” (       ) An example of this is, an administrator pulls a bully into her office and states, “My concern is, is that you were making someone feel so uncomfortable, that they didn't wanna be in school” (Kim Lockwood).
• Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim: explain quote, connect to claim The administrator shows that she is aware of the bullying problem and that she wants to fix it. She has concerns about how this issue is hurting the students that she is responsible for.
• What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument? (use rebuttal progression language) Many think that the problem is solved right away after a teacher or administrator speaks to the bully, and one cannot deny that can sometimes be the case. However many times the scenario is not solved and the bullying does not stop. For example, in the documentary when Alex, a bullied kid, tells an administrator that he is being bullied, so she calls the bully into her office and tells him to stop. Even though the administrator told the bully to stop Alex testifies that that kid still bullies him on a daily basis.